Ash/White

[howlingwolf]

Name:Ashfur(ashpaw and ashkit)
Age:100 moons
Gender:Tom
Appearence:He has a lighter gray build with darkesr gray flecks.He has a dark blue eyes that compliment his build.He is slender and strong.Under his coat is alot of muscle.
Rank:Warrior
Clan:Thunderclan
Apprentice:none
Mother:Brindleface(book)
Father:Whitestorm(book)
Sisters:Ferncloud and marshkit(dead)
Brothers:none
History:When ashfur was ashpaw he and his sister fenrpaw's mother died.Tigerstar killed brindleface.He and fernpaw helped protect the camp from dogs that were lurking in the forest.
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Name:Whitewing
Age:90 moons
Gender:She cat
Appearance:She has a glossy white coat like her father.SHe has one green eye that is from her mother and her blue eye is from her father.
Rank:Warrior
Clan:Thunderclan
Mother:Brightheart(book)
Father:Cloudtail(book)
Sisters:None
Brothers:None
Kits:None
History:She grew up and became a warrior.


Role play for both:"Go on!" Birchfall murmured, nudging her with his nose. Whitewing's fur flushed hot, as she tore her eyes away from Ashfur and looked at her companion. "You can do it! Just tell him how you feel! There's not another she-cat in sight that wants him, to be completely honest. The floors open, so step up! Besides, I don't see a reason in the world why Ashfur wouldn't feel the same way!" Birchfall purred encouragingly. Whitewing's eyes glowed with gratitude as she gazed at the brown tom who had always been a brother to her, and she rose to her paws. Taking a deep breath, the white she-cat padded over to Ashfur. But, before she could reach him, a ginger she-cat stepped pointedly between them and purred to Ashfur. Ashfur's eyes lit up and he echoed her purr. The speckled gray warrior nodded a small acknowledgement to Whitewing and followed the other attractive she-cat out of camp. Whitewing stood, frozen, but her legs were shaking. Her mouth was hanging open, and she was unable to escape as the two cats disappeared. "Wh-Who's that girl, Birchfall?" she asked at last, her voice a grief-stricken whisper. Birchfall looked down at his paws, wondering what he could say to comfort her. But there was nothing he could say. "Squirrelflight," he answered, and turned away.Whitewing dropped her head it going so low she seemed to be a puff of cloud except this cloud was in a storm of tears.Whitewing ran off looking bck to see ashfur's face looking happy as ever."ashfur why?!why her!?"she yelled to the sky.She curled up in a old fox den that the scent was stale.She cried so much tht she layed in a puddle of her own tears until she heard a rush of pawsteps.She sniffed but her nose couldnt tell.A light gray paw with darker flecks came through then a orange paw then a brown paw."Go away!"she yelled.All three paws ripped out and three heads stuck in.Ashfur Birchfall and Squirrelflight.Whitewing yelled at them and toar off the roof to the hole she ran on.She heard one pair of footsteps behind her when she stopped a while away"Whitewing whats wrong"Ashfur asked calmly.That was the final straw."Ashfur?why her?why her over me?why her?"she breathed.Ashfur looked at her odd then pawsteps."Her"whitewing said then suqirrelflight came out of the bushes along with brambleclaw who was rubbing against her."Listen ashy this isnt gonna work i love brambleclaw."ashfur was heartbroken.Whitewing rubbed against him and tried to calm him down."Ashfur it's ok she isnt good enough for you"she said staring at him.Ashfurs eyes went lank then filled with emotions."Whitewing?do you like me more then a friend he spoke"Whitewing looked taken back."I do ashfur i do"

[[x].xx.Lightningfire.xx.[x]]

Can you make them older like... 100 moons (10 yrs) as it has been a long time since Cloudtail died.

[Featherstar]

Actually, they're about 7/8 years old, which fits. I only have one problem, and I'm not rippiong on you or anything? but can you use commas in your rp? Everything kinda runs together and makes it difficult to read.